(21st April 2022, 7:33 PM)Matt Wrote: i  have read books shorter than this

(21st April 2022, 10:39 PM)Different Wrote: If every story you read of someone's, were really short, you might is well stop reading them because eventually it gets boring as hell to read. You're just one of those people who don't like to read long stories. Fine by me, but I'm not going to shorten them to appease a small minority of people; That'd be ridiculous.

My goal isn't to appease everyone... my goal is to create a damn good story.

(21st April 2022, 9:55 PM)David Wrote: I'd grab the pepper spray that's in my pocket and spray him then go for the gun that's 5 feet away from me

(22nd April 2022, 11:17 AM)Mystery Wrote: Keep making these threads if you enjoy making them, and ignore the haters. You have a real knack for coming up with scenarios!

(23rd April 2022, 12:50 AM)Delphinoid Wrote: To be fair the only reasons I have for checking this website are Northadox's PR clone thread and your threads rofl, so I think that must count for something. These threads are genuinely funny imo (and that's meant as a complement).

I guess I will say, though, that in their current form they're a little hard to reply in the intended way to. This is also partially why I referred to the last couple as being sadistic; i.e., you put the reader in a situation where they're totally helpless and just have to accept (usually awful) stuff happening to them, which isn't really engaging in the way that it looks like they're supposed to be. This thread almost has the same kind of "issue", where it concludes with your imminent death, but I guess it's subverted slightly based on the options in the poll. That being said, these threads are still fun to read, although mostly because of the sheer ridiculousness of the situations and the exaggerated writing style (large font, highlighting words, random stock photos, bizarrely specific details on irrelevant stuff like height / weight, etc.).

This is a bit of a random remark but something that I think would be cool to see in general (although I don't know if I'd be able to take part in it myself, rip) is one of those "choose your own adventure" threads that used to pop up occasionally on the original JV. The OP sets up some kind of open-ended scenario and acts as a sort of dungeon master for the people who reply. Actually since JV2 has such a small userbase, that kind of thing might be pretty manageable.

(22nd April 2022, 11:29 AM)Different Wrote: I appreciate it, bro! Yeah it's very difficult to tell a damn good story, where the majority of people will reply, vote, and leave thanks, too. The reason my threads are so sadistic sometimes is because I think it just makes the story, interesting. Honestly, I have no idea what these people like out of a story.

It all depends on the audience, and these people aren't it. JV is just virtually, dead. They regurgitate the same shit, every week.

(24th April 2022, 12:09 AM)Delphinoid Wrote: If you've ever played old-school text-based adventure games, it's a bit like that. Maybe the best way to explain it would be with an example. Take this thread for instance; if it were me writing it, here's what I would have done.

First I have a bit of a nitpick: if you notice your house has been broken into, the last thing you should ever do is enter the house. If you can't call emergency services on your cell phone, you should ask a neighbour. As I result, I would have written it so it wasn't immediately obvious that the house was broken into (maybe they broke in through the back?). I also don't like how you're told how your friend is setting everything up towards the end. Anyway, I'd conclude the OP with something like this:

"By the time you return home, you're completely checked out. As you pull yourself through the entrance hall, you notice an unusually eerie silence encompassing you like a thick fog, but are too exhausted to pay it much mind. That is, until you open the door to your bedroom, at which point it suddenly culminates in a frightening realization: your house has been broken into. Your entire bedroom lies in disarray: your bedsheets have been carved up and are strewn across the floor, furniture has been toppled, and other various personal belongings are smashed and lying in pieces. You stand in the doorway, too stunned to move, with your heart sunken deep into your stomach. No sooner have you begun to ask yourself if the person responsible is still around than your thought is abruptly answered. Your bedroom closet swings open, and as a figure emerges you catch glimpse of a menacing kitchen knife in their hand, glimmering with fresh blood. Before you have time to wonder whose blood it is, the man begins to rush towards you."

I tried my best but I guess I wasn't able to think of a way to lead this story into something interesting, but the point is that you set it up in a way where the reader has lots of potential options that they can come up with on their own (not something I managed to do in this case). This would usually include describing the surroundings in more detail and what the reader has access to (pepper spray in their pocket, for instance).

When people respond, you can continue the story for them, taking their response into account. Ideally, it can develop into an interesting, interactive story.

(26th April 2022, 8:41 AM)*Izi-Blissers* Wrote: I'd much rather die thanks just kill me bro, it is what it is.